Evacuating London

I like it! You're good at details and had no spelling errors that I could see so could job! I especially loved that last paragraph with the Alice in Wonderland ...

Wow. Just wow. I really liked this story. You have a really good introduction and your description of Callie is written very nicely. I can picture her almost perfectly in ...

Overall, I really liked this short story. It really kept me hooked until the end. So well done! Although, I don't think the PG rating suited this very well. I ...

Awww. This was really cute! It was written quite nicely and there weren't too many grammar errors (or at least, ones that I could pick out) but I think you ...

Twilight. Of course! It's absolutely dreadful , and I mean every little bit of it. In my opinion, Edward is an abusive boyfriend disguised to look like a Prince Charming, ...

Flipped by Wendelin Van Draaken (One of the cutest love stories I've ever read) Shug by Jenny Han (that'll actually be in the children's section, but nevertheless, it's still enjoyable) ...

It's good so far, but I would suggest some use of adjectives and a couple of short descriptive paragraphs here and there to give us a feel for what's actually ...